Powerful Personal Narratives Part III

37 Responses to “Powerful Personal Narratives Part III”

  1. Mrs. Rodek-Gray says:

    I loved the stories! I can’t believe how much your writing has improved since first grade ;) Thank you for sharing.

  2. Ms. Gonzalez says:

    Great job, Ms. Eiseman’s class! I really enjoyed hearing your personal narratives. Keep up the good work!

  3. Ms. Eiseman says:

    To All of My Authors,
    I am so impressed by your writing and story telling. Who taught you so well? ;)

  4. Ishika says:

    Your tone of voice really showed the sarcasm of your story!

  5. Jillian says:

    I loved how you changed the tone of your voice when you needed.

  6. Sukruthi says:


    I liked the way you made your voice loud when you needed to. Great job.

  7. Tulip says:


    I really liked your jingles. You also made your voice loud when you needed to!

  8. Sukruthi says:


    I liked the way you said your story using a sense of humor. It made me laugh.

  9. Jessica says:

    I liked how you used the simile, “As fast as lightning”. Great job.:)

  10. Tulip says:


    I really liked your title! It made me laugh. It’s also a really descriptive title!!

  11. Rudra says:

    Dear Abhishek,

    I liked the way that you used some funny sentences, such as, “It was as hard as a baby taking the SAT.” Great job!

  12. Rahul says:

    Dear Rudra,
    I liked the accents you used in your story.

    From: Rahu

  13. Deepti says:

    I liked how you described how you were walking up and down the steps with buckets of water. Your story was entertaining!!!!!!

  14. Deepti says:

    Dear Aanshi,
    I liked how you added jingles throughout your story. It made your story interesting to listen to:P

  15. Helen says:

    Even though I was your partner, and heard your podcast at home, I still had the urge to listen to your story again. The metaphor, “Our eyes were balls bouncing up the walls,” really tells me how energetic you were at night. AWESOME!

  16. Ashwin says:

    Dear Rudra,
    I liked the way you said, “I’m sowwy” and the illustration.

  17. Amy says:

    The way you began your story made me laugh. Good job!

  18. Helen says:

    The ways you used your baby voice to say “Sorry” somehow told me you didn’t really mean it. Still, your story was awesome.

  19. Aanshi says:


    Great story! I really like the jingle you added! I wish I thought of using that jingle! I really thought your cover was spectacular! Really good!

  20. khabib says:

    to: Abeshek,

    I like how you wrote “THE BIG MATCH” on your illustration. I’m not lying!

  21. Amy says:

    Even though I was your partner, I wanted to hear your story again. You described everything very well and I could picture you hiding from Vanshika behind the door. Keep up the good work! :)

  22. Amy says:

    Your title really caught my eye!!!!!!!!!!! Keep up the good work!!!!!!!!!!!!! :) :):)

  23. Helen says:

    Thanks, Amy. The title of your story reminds me of the story Alexander and the Terrible, Horrible, No Good Very Bad Day.

  24. Aanshi says:


    I was your partner, but I still wanted to hear your story! I really liked the way you were telling the story! Your voice was at the right tone when you wanted to sound loud! Your jingle was a really good one! I wish I used it! Great job!

    From: Aanshi

  25. Aanshi says:


    Thanks a million for the comment! I really appreciate you giving me a comment! your story was also great! I liked your jingles to! I wish I thought of using that jingle! Your title ~ really~ caught my eye! Thanks again!

  26. Aanshi says:


    I really liked your story! I also really enjoy your cover! I remember how hard you worked to get it done! I think that you are a really ~ good~ artist! I really enjoyed your story, I think I could relate to it!

  27. Aanshi says:


    Thanks a lot for putting in a comment for me! I really liked your story too! You did a good job choosing a jingle! Thanks again!


  28. Deepti says:

    I liked how you used a lot of the things in our writer’s toolbox.(similies,metaphor’s, show don’t tell etc.) It sure made the story more interesting!!!!!

  29. Deepti says:

    I liked the tone of your voice during the story. It sure made me read on:)

  30. Aanshi says:


    I think you did a really good job on your story! You really caught my attention at the end of the story! I think your jingle was great, and your artwork… something to talk about! Great job!

  31. Himanshu says:

    Awesome work from all the kids, HATS OFF to them!!! Thanks to Ms. Eiseman for taking all the effort in putting this together. Great Job !

  32. Ashwin says:

    Dear Abisheik,
    I liked the way you said dan,dan,dan.

  33. Kirti says:

    Dear Rudra,

    I was really impressed with your story. I liked the way you said “oops I’m sowwy:)


  34. Aanshi says:


    Thanks a lot for the comment! I really, truly, liked your story as well! Your jingle was great! And your story… GREAT! I loved your front cover as well! Thanks a million!

    ~ Aanshi~

  35. Jillian says:

    You are a great writer. It was so vivid I felt like I was in the story!

  36. Jessica says:

    I really liked how you used a lot of detail. You really got my attention when you talked about the trick. Great job.:)

  37. Pushpendra says:

    Dear Rudra,

    Your presentation was excellent, and your voice was very clear. I like the word you twisted such as sowwy.


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